Short story/ description of the picture with the painter in the bedroom.
The painter
I wasn't used to that kind of work. I usually painted pretty girls, rich majors or landscapes. This order was different. I was called early sunday morning. It was even before the church bell rung or the birds started singing. A woman whose husband died that night. She asked me to paint him. It sounded strange to me so I told her no. But the amount of money she offered me I couldn't reject.
Dela, I loved your description. I could actually picture the painter and a woman talking. I think that you had a great desciption in this writing. I wonder what your story is all about. I wish there was more! :)
I think this is about the image we saw in class if so, I like it because you really thought outside the box. I wonder what would happen if you described what they ended up painting. I wish I could read more.
What an intriguing opening. Your first line, "I wasn't used to that kind of work" sets the stage for something unusual to occur and then the details ... a death portrait ... and too much money to refuse. You've really mastered the art of bringing a reader into a story. I wonder and want to know what is going to happen next.
This was so cool Dela! I never thought of writing something like that but it came out really good, you did a really good job. I wonder what would have happened if you wrote more and went onto what he actually saw when he went to do the painting. I wish you wrote more so I could find out (:
I really like how you wrote something different from what you usually write. It was very interesting, I like how you wrote something so short but there was a lot of great detail worked into it. I wish that you had written more like what did the painting look like after it was finished. I wonder how much the painter got for painting a picture of a dead person. Great Job!
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Short story/ description of the picture with the painter in the bedroom.
The painter
I wasn't used to that kind of work. I usually painted pretty girls, rich majors or landscapes. This order was different. I was called early sunday morning. It was even before the church bell rung or the birds started singing. A woman whose husband died that night. She asked me to paint him. It sounded strange to me so I told her no. But the amount of money she offered me I couldn't reject.
I really liked this it was different but good. I wonder what it would be like if you had added more details. I wish you could have wrote more.
Dela, I loved your description. I could actually picture the painter and a woman talking. I think that you had a great desciption in this writing. I wonder what your story is all about. I wish there was more! :)
I think this is about the image we saw in class if so, I like it because you really thought outside the box. I wonder what would happen if you described what they ended up painting. I wish I could read more.
What an intriguing opening. Your first line, "I wasn't used to that kind of work" sets the stage for something unusual to occur and then the details ... a death portrait ... and too much money to refuse. You've really mastered the art of bringing a reader into a story. I wonder and want to know what is going to happen next.
I just read Jordyn's comment & wow, what a different take on that image!!! I hope you keep writing on it.
I enjoyed this Dela. Its really catching, and described good. I would've never of thought of doing something like this, and Im glad you did(:
This was so cool Dela! I never thought of writing something like that but it came out really good, you did a really good job. I wonder what would have happened if you wrote more and went onto what he actually saw when he went to do the painting. I wish you wrote more so I could find out (:
I really like how you wrote something different from what you usually write. It was very interesting, I like how you wrote something so short but there was a lot of great detail worked into it. I wish that you had written more like what did the painting look like after it was finished. I wonder how much the painter got for painting a picture of a dead person. Great Job!
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