I am here in the time of now Looking forward to the day that will follow I know that soon the peacefulness of now will end But I am here in the time of now and nothing can take me that and end.
I liked this poem is was very peaceful. I wonder what would happen if you altered the ending a little bit so it was less confusing. I wish I could write poems as well as you.
I like your poem, i can really picture what you are saying. I wish that you made it a little more clear because it was kind of confusing. I wish that you wrote longer because it was pretty short.
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A moment in time
(originally by Emma Parrazzo)
I am here in the time of now
Looking forward
to the day that will follow
I know that soon
the peacefulness of now will end
But I am here in the time of now
and nothing can take me that
and end.
I liked this poem is was very peaceful. I wonder what would happen if you altered the ending a little bit so it was less confusing. I wish I could write poems as well as you.
Dela, I loved your poem! It's so sweet and cute. I wonder what you changed from the first original. I wish my rewrite of a poem was good like this. :)
I really liked this. I wonder what it would be like if you had change it even more. I wish I knew what the real poem was like.
I like your poem, i can really picture what you are saying. I wish that you made it a little more clear because it was kind of confusing. I wish that you wrote longer because it was pretty short.
I liked your poem. It was wicked soothing, & easy to comprehend. Your very good at writing poems & making them sound so good(:
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