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Friday, April 15, 2011
Creative Writing - Publish & Perish 4/15/2011
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The earth and everything around makes the world. From up in the air it just seems green and blue. In the night is gets dark; daytime there is light. It changes around the clock, all the time. Millions of people travel their own journey; try to make the best out of their life.
Different people in different places live ones live, but there was one little girl alone in the world, trying to make it their own journey. A little girl with eyes so blue, forgetting about reality and time. All she wanted was to find the light.
She lived during the night and slept at day light. All she owned was her own life. She searched for the perfect place with all the time a person could have in this whole world. She was searching for a place with sky in blue. A perfect place to end her journey.
Her reason for leaving on this long journey was to get out of the darkness into light, and finally see colors like red and blue. She didn't find her place in her old life, that's why she decided to see the world. She left everything and took all the time.
She was gone for long and by went her time. She had to find the aim of her journey, where it might be, her place in this world. Her place to be awake at daylight. A place to live her life, with all the colors; red and blue.
A place with sunshine and sky in blue. This was worth all the little girls time. To find what she wanted in her life, and to end her yearlong journey. The darkness to disappear, to shine the light. This was the place for her in the world.
One day in blue she came to the end of her journey. Her time stopped and she saw the light. Her life ended and she left the world.
*Commenting on Dela's Blog* I really think that the six words fit in really well together :). I wish maybe you were clearer on how the girl died, kind of confusing. I wonder what you were picturing when you were thinking of writing your sestina. good job
Commenting on Dela's Post I really, really, enjoyed reading your writing because it made me fascinated and my imagination was just running wild because of it. I could picture so much of the little girl. I wonder, if the little girl could possibly be you or another girl. I wish you did more on describing the little girl.
I really liked this it gave a lot of details about how the girl sees the world and how she gets through. i wonder what it would be like to be that girl and live the way you described it. i wish you could have told us more about where this takes place and more about the place she was describing in stead of just describing the world.
Dela, I really enjoyed how successfully you were able to apply the rules of the sestina. Like your classmates, I wish there were some more concrete descriptions of the girl and the world to hold onto (as a reader), but I also wonder what impact that would have on this as it feels so dreamlike in its current condition.
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SESTINA
DELA HERR
The little girls journey of her life
The earth and everything around makes the world.
From up in the air it just seems green and blue.
In the night is gets dark; daytime there is light.
It changes around the clock, all the time.
Millions of people travel their own journey;
try to make the best out of their life.
Different people in different places live ones live,
but there was one little girl alone in the world,
trying to make it their own journey.
A little girl with eyes so blue,
forgetting about reality and time.
All she wanted was to find the light.
She lived during the night and slept at day light.
All she owned was her own life.
She searched for the perfect place with all the time
a person could have in this whole world.
She was searching for a place with sky in blue.
A perfect place to end her journey.
Her reason for leaving on this long journey
was to get out of the darkness into light,
and finally see colors like red and blue.
She didn't find her place in her old life,
that's why she decided to see the world.
She left everything and took all the time.
She was gone for long and by went her time.
She had to find the aim of her journey,
where it might be, her place in this world.
Her place to be awake at daylight.
A place to live her life,
with all the colors; red and blue.
A place with sunshine and sky in blue.
This was worth all the little girls time.
To find what she wanted in her life,
and to end her yearlong journey.
The darkness to disappear, to shine the light.
This was the place for her in the world.
One day in blue she came to the end of her journey.
Her time stopped and she saw the light.
Her life ended and she left the world.
My blog is http://mariahcoulstring.blogspot.com/
My blog address is: http://lizzyswritingblog.blogspot.com/
*Commenting on Dela's Blog*
I really think that the six words fit in really well together :). I wish maybe you were clearer on how the girl died, kind of confusing. I wonder what you were picturing when you were thinking of writing your sestina. good job
My blog is: http://chelleswords.blogspot.com/
Commenting on Dela's Post I really, really, enjoyed reading your writing because it made me fascinated and my imagination was just running wild because of it. I could picture so much of the little girl. I wonder, if the little girl could possibly be you or another girl. I wish you did more on describing the little girl.
I loved this, I didn't even realize it was a sestina until I was done and read other peoples comments, it flowed together nicely and was poetic.
I really liked this it gave a lot of details about how the girl sees the world and how she gets through. i wonder what it would be like to be that girl and live the way you described it. i wish you could have told us more about where this takes place and more about the place she was describing in stead of just describing the world.
Dela, I really enjoyed how successfully you were able to apply the rules of the sestina. Like your classmates, I wish there were some more concrete descriptions of the girl and the world to hold onto (as a reader), but I also wonder what impact that would have on this as it feels so dreamlike in its current condition.
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